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Some think that private companies and individuals should pay for cleaning up pollution, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss and state your own opinion.

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As economies develop and population grow, certain areas become polluted, which adversely affects the environment and the ecosystem as a whole. While everyone agrees that pollution is a serious threat, many argue who should take the responsibility to clean up: the government or private companies. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument. On the one hand, it is true that the governments - in theory - are responsible to ensure that laws and regulations are upheld. As some areas in countries already have environmental laws some
businesses
 still don't follow them.
Therefore
 it is the government's responsibility to find the
businesses
 that do not follow the regulations.
On the other hand
, companies and individuals should be responsible to pay for their threat to ecology. Private
businesses
 should be conscious of their actions and their effect on the ecosystem.
For example
, groceries can go green by replacing plastic bags with paper bags. Individuals can boycott the products of companies known to pollute. Overall, I strongly believe that those who polluted should be charged and be responsible to return the environment to its natural state, but
businesses
 will not do it unless the central power doesn't force them. As it is the government's role to ensure that laws and regulations are enforced and individuals who damage and destroy the environment for their personal benefits are severely punished for their environmental irresponsibility.
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