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many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people however think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#governments #progress #people #country
Nowadays, the discussion regarding whether the government should regard the economic developments of the entire country as their top
prioritoes
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priorities
 has sparked off an
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 debate among the public. In my honest opinion,
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 believe that even though it is vitally important to reach optimum economic
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growth
, other
indicators
 should
also
 not be neglected. On the one hand, it is inevitable for the policies maker to put economic
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growth
 as their top priorities.
This
 is because,
first
, in comparison to other
indicators
 like the human
develope
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development
 index, it is far from difficult for the politicians to keep the economic
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growth
 at a constant rate since, in the end, the construction of
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infrastructure
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 dramatically increase the economic
development
, and of which can be easily accomplished by the
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.
Secondly
, the economic
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growth
 is
also
 more measurable than other
indicators
 like adult literacy rate, since it is hard to distinguish the illiterate from the literate.
However
, for
economic
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the economic
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 process, the gross domestic
production
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product
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 can be easily measured by
multipling
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multiplying
 the amount of the products that
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 produced in the country
last
 year and their own prices. All in all
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 two factors can let the politicians
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apply
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get a higher political achievement and
this
 may serve as the reason why they seek economic growth as the most important indicator.
on the other hand
, it is
also
undeniablly
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undeniably
undeniable
 that other
indicators
 especially the one for the all-rounded
development
 should be
also
 given a decent position in terms of
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 importance. Confused by the economic
development
, the entire public may be
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misguided
 and
therefore
 neglect
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 key aspect of
development
 in their society progresses given that they only consider the economic growth. to sum
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 the above-mentioned statements,
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even though
the
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economic
progresses
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progress
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 is important, other
indicators
 should
also
 be taken into consideration when deciding the policies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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