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Everyone of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#meat #health
Vegetarianism is a type of feeding choice where the person eliminates animal flesh from their eating schedule. Some argue
this
 environmentally choice is healthier and prevent illnesses. The paragraphs below will outline
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evidencing
 the role of animal proteins in immune system improvement and in the human species evolution.
To begin
 with, the main reason why I believe that eating meat is advantageous for human health is due to
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 role in boosting the immune system to combat viruses and bacteria diseases. More specifically, the proteins which compose animal muscles have an essential activity in catalyzing reactions inside our body, leading
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 and more effective immune cells. To illustrate
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, it is known that people who experienced hunger for long periods are more likely to develop critical forms of any disease than people
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 well.
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, another reason to justify
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animal protein sources had on brain cells development after their introduction
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 individuals diet. The prior human species, Homo erectus,
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, used to have a slighter brain than the current one, Homo sapiens. As a matter of fact, one of the motives that experts have considered to be determinant in the process was due to
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 erectus diet consisted mainly of fruits and seeds.
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, after individuals started eating meat, their brain cells increased in number, leading to a consequent enlargement organ and improved cognition. To summarize, I utterly disagree that animal meat is harmful to our health,
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 can result in negative outcomes to individuals well-being.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chronic diseases
  • balanced diet
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • plant-based diet
  • ethical concerns
  • environmental impact
  • deforestation
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable
  • Vitamin B12
  • processed meat substitutes
  • social and cultural implications
  • mitigate
  • full-time vegetarian
  • plant-based options
  • health benefits
  • commit to vegetarianism
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