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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to make drivers retake driving test safety. To what extent do you agree or disagree this opinion?

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It is argued that making
drivers
to
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retake
driving
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test
 every
year
 is the best way to improve
road
safety
. While I think
this
method
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cold
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could
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not
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does not
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 solve the main problems of
road
safety
, I believe that an annual driving
test
 could prevent some kinds of
accidents
such
 as those caused by illegal driving. I think that the
method
 of making
drivers
to
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retake
driving
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the driving
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test
 every
year
 is a waste of time for them. A driver who got the
license
 legally must has eligible ability on driving, because they have to pass the driving
test
 before getting the driving licenses.
On
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the
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other word, if you want to get
driving
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a driving
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license
 but you didn’t pass the driving
test
, it is impossible for you to get
the
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a
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 driving
license
. For those
drivers
 who get driving
license
 properly, it is a waste of time for them to retake the driving
test
 every
year
. That’s why I think that
this
method
 has not
much
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 effects on improving
road
safety
.
Nevertheless
, not all
drivers
 get
driving
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a driving
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license
 in
this
 way. Some people have no much time to learn how to drive and have a driving
test
;
instead
, they learned driving rules simply and buy a
license
. These people who get driving
license
 illegal often do not make any mistakes, for they know the result if the others know
this
.
However
，there were a few
accidents
 caused by illegal driving, so the
method
 that
make
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drivers
to
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apply
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retake
driving
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the driving
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test
 could
avoids
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avoid
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 those
accidents
which
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caused by illegal driving, prevent the
accidents
 that the driver could not drive very well for they did not pass the driving
test
. In conclusion, I think that making
drivers
to
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apply
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retake
driving
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the driving
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test
 every
year
 could only prevent the driver get
fake
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a fake
the fake
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license
, but it is not the best way to improve
the
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apply
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road
safety
.
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