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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Economic
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 sector plays an important part in our life, so many
governments
 think to make a
progress
 in economy, while some
people
 argue that there are many
types
 of
progress
 that share value of importance for the
country
. In
this
 essay, both sides of the argument will be discussed, and I will give my opinion in regards to the debate. It is true that many
governments
 around the world are focussing very much on economic goals. Because
economic
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 has a big impact
for
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 measuring how the
country
 is in developing or not,
for
example
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governments
 in many countries make a program for their citizen to practice investing
on
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in
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 stocks, as we know that stocks can be one of aspect
about
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 economic growth in a
country
. Even though economic
progress
 is considered significant in measuring one
country
’s wealth, there are other important
types
 of
progress
 that should be considered by
governments
. It is believed that some
types
 of
progress
, aside from economic
progress
, are equally important for a
country
. The
first
 important
progress
 is in relation to
education
.
Education
 is
the
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 important role for
have
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a great citizens
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great citizens
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.
Education
 makes citizen smarter and
have
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 much
knowladge
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knowledge
 to build a
country
.
For
example
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governments
 can
makes
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 electronic library becomes free access for citizens to reach
the
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 goals. Another important
progress
 is in regards to culture.
People
 who have a good
attitute
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attitude
 will make a big impact
for
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on
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 the
country
,
for
example
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 humans who say thank you to
another
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other
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people
 will make the other
people
 happier and make
a
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great
progress
for
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in
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 their work. Because
usually
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people
 tend to
makes
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 good result when other
people
 prices others. To conclude, it is educational and cultural
progress
 that matters compared to that of
in
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an
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 economy.
Although
 economic
progress
 plays an important role, I believe that there are some of other
types
progress
,
such
 as
education
 and culture,
that is
 more important.
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