The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is waste of money. Government should invest these funds in public service instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

All government authorities spend a certain
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of their annual budget to develop cultural activity among the residents. There are people who believe that
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is not worthy at all,rather authority should utilize
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I will explain why not agreed with the said topic completely. Generally speaking,
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cultural activity act as a mirror for the nation. Without
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from the Government,it is not possible to develop cultural centres nationwide where children can learn and showcase
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national traditions through arts, music , theatre and so on.
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this
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generation who will represent the nation
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the best possible way. Another good example to prove the cultural expanses
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, is that theatre program through which all the artist become famous worldwide and they carry the country's flag as well to the international stages,
therefore
country
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famous. Despite these arguments, there are people who are against
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patronizing culture and advocate
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these allocations in public service. But
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will not work that way without developing cultural strength. In
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I would say that
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cultural development is vital for
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identity and Nation has to pay for it if not investing
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cultural progress.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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