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Large companies should pay higher standard to CEOS and Executives compared to other workers. To What extent do you agree or disagree

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It's true that big
organisation
 provide high salaries to CEOs and Executive compared to
employees
, while I accept that it seems that lower
employees
 exploited by top-management but the
organisation
 important decision regarding growth and profit earn and management done by the top
level
.So, In my ,opinion they have a major right in profit earn's by the
company
. As well as it's impractical the
organisation
 provide equal salary to all different hierarchy of employee. On the one hand, The
responsibility
 to run the business is on Top-Hierarchy which include the CEO & the Executive. The middle
level
 includes the manager and supervisor who has the
responsibility
 to implement the Rule and Regulation of Top- Management as well summits the reports where as well as submit the reports whereas the lower
level
 include Labours and workers who have the
responsibility
 to
work
 according to top-
level
 hierarchy.
As a result
, it's not possible to provide equal remuneration to all the different
level
 of
employees
. They have different
work
 and
responsibility
 in the
company
.
On the other hand
, Some companies do not pay equal remuneration to
work
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working
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 done by a middle and lower
level
 of employee. They exploit their
employees
 by underpaid salaries .
As a result
, It increases
employees
 turnover, Increases dissatisfaction among
employees
 and strike. Nowadays
employees
 have the right and different opportunity to
work
 for another
company
 or file against the
organisation
 under labour laws
such
 as the Minimum Wages Act. In practical terms, In every large ,
company
 there is an H.R and Union Leader who complain on behalf of the
employees
. In conclusion, I disagree with the statement large companies should provide equal remuneration to all the
employees
. In every ,business every worker has a different position and
responsibility
 . According to that, they get paid.
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