Some people think that criminals should be given longer term imprisonment, so as to reduce the crime rate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

crime
is a serious problem in all countries. nowadays,
crime
increase rapidly in our life. Few locals believe that to decrease the rate of
crime
it is necessary for criminals to give them long punishments.
Although
, I agree and believe that given longer-term prison to the criminal is beneficial, in some cases alternative ways are better. I will discuss both
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aspects in an upcoming essay. On the one hand, there are several benefits of long term imprisonment to tackle
this
issue.
In other words
, big punishments are necessary for those who do serious crimes
such
as murder, violence and so on.
Therefore
, offenders are not made to mix with society. Lifetime punishment discourages people to do
cime
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time
as a result
they think twice before attempting a
crime
. They get an opportunity
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rehabilitation that are available inside the jail.
Furthermore
, spending time in
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long imprisonment provides the chance to rethink what they did and
then
they realize his or her guilty. Longer prisons strike fear in the heart of people.
On the other hand
, there are better alternative ways
instead
of lifetime punishment
such
as education training and so which offenders do minor mistakes
likewise
shoplifter, pickpockets etc. It is not good for those people, if they leave with serious criminals
then
they become characterwise bad
consequently
they do not improve their character. They get wrong information and guidance from other criminals if government spend money on their education and training
then
they give positive feedback to society
for example
they help in constructing the building and as a farmer in harvesting.
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, there are
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of benefits for lifetime punishment. I agree with
this
statement, in some
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alternative way is better for minor mistakes.
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