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The way in which greenhouse gases trap the solar
energy
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 in the earth’s
atmosphere
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 is portrayed in the given diagram. Overall, it is clear that human activities are held responsible for holding back a certain amount of heat
energy
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 from the sun from radiating back to space. As shown in the diagram, the irrational feeling of trees that absorb carbon dioxide from the
atmosphere
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 is seen as one of the crucial factors behind
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 phenomenon.
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 increases the concentration of carbon dioxide in the
atmosphere
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. The proportion of carbon dioxide in the
atmosphere
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also
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 increases when a large
amount
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 of toxic fumes are emitted by industries and vehicles.
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 sort of addition of greenhouse gases is responsible for holding back a specific proportion of heat
energy
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 from the Sun in the earth’s
atmosphere
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.
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, a major proportion of the heat
energy
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 from the sun is radiated back to space and some
energy
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 is reflected off the
atmosphere
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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