Some people say that no one should work after the age of sixty-five while others say that they can work as long as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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leads to better well-being and prosperous life .
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some chunks of folks argue that
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while others argued that
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can
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without any age barrier.The forthcoming essay will discuss both aspects and my opinion
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, the
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years are still working in our society , is mainly due to lack of money.These
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for the
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of the needs of their own
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. Mostly the adults in the
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are working to meet their needs,
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in some cases the elder needs to
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in their old age for the survival of their dependents.
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an accident,
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it is the responsibility
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person of that family to cater
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needs of others .
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the aged
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to earn for their own and for their
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, the older generation should provide a space to younger ones
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to create more employment opportunities. There
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vast difference between the approaches used by them due to
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age gaps like education and working pattern
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to collect
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information statistic old
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mostly rely on landline
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younger
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will collect information through various new technologies like
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and mobile phones without
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delays. In
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era , adults are more capable of handling technological updation rather than old ones. In my point of view,
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can
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and earn,if it is necessary for themselves and for their
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Otherwise
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they can leave their professions and provide opportunities for
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the younger
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generation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mandatory retirement age
  • quality of life
  • unemployment
  • arbitrary age limit
  • individual capability
  • mentally active
  • valuable assets
  • experience and knowledge
  • continuity and stability
  • fresh ideas
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