In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, in
Britain
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some elder people decide to move to a
nursery
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home where medical
care
is provided and
in
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on
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occasions
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,occasions
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the
government
provides the funds for
this
care
.
Although
some people need
the
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economical support to pay for
this
service, I do not believe it should be always provided.
This
essay will shed light on when it is believed to be appropriate to
received
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economical support for
this
service and when is not.
Firstly
, I do believe that having
economical
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support from the
government
is a great benefit for the elder population. Recent statistics have shown that the greatest amount of accidents at home are due to the lack of
care
from family members in combination with a low income, which leaves
families
without the opportunity of having their
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ones in a nursery home. Based
in
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that information had the
government
provided the fund for retirement homes, there would be less predictable accidents among the elders.
On the other hand
, It is said that having their
families
paid for
this
type of service is the right thing to do. A recent survey indicated that many
families
who are wealthy are being paid for their
nursering
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nursing
nursery
services. I do not believe
this
situation to be fair as they do not need extra funds. To sum up, In my opinion
government
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should evaluate
families
economical circumstances and according to that provide the money required for
this
care
only when proven to be needed,
oas
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as
a result not only should the
government
be responsible to pay for elder
care
but
also
the
families
when able to
affort
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afford
it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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