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Researches has shown that spending much less time in office can reduce the use of energy for example electricity gas and gas. Thus some companies close for days or a week to do the advantages outweight the disadvantage.

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In the contemporary era, there is an argument over
an
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 issue that any
energy
 can be saved if the spending time is limited in any working field. So , certain organizations shut down for days or a week . Despite
of
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having certain merits of
this
 trend ,
demirits
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demerits
 clearly outweigh its advantages. On one hand , any nation would face economic loss if any working field remains close. To elaborate it, if companies remain shut down for some days or a week , peoples will face a salary problem they
dont
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don't
 have enough money to spend on various commodities.
For example
, the headline in 'Moscow Time ' revealed that in Japan every Saturday or Sunday markets were closed, which leads to the loss of economic status.
Hence
 ,
this
 step has a negative impact on a country.
On the other hand
 , in
this
 ,way there is a benefit of closing companies for a week or a day.
In other words
, there is no one to use
energy
 because all firms were close or allocating less time in office . Since it is extremely difficult to generate any
energy
 , the government should adopt
this
 policy to reduce the intake of any renewable energies.
For instance
 , in, Britain there is a law that offices or working fields open only from Monday to Friday and there is two
day
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days
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 off.
Although
 in
this
 way we saved
the
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 small percentage of
energy
, the disadvantages of it can not be neglected. To conclude,
eventhough
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even though
 there is
reduction
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reducing
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the intake of
energy
 by
this
 method , demerits of
this
 clearly surpasses its merits . it is predicted that in future there will never
markets
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market
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