a new generation of entrepreneurs believe that privately funded space tourism will be the next exciting development in space exploration. How true do you think this is? How would space tourism affect space exploration as we know it today?

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corporation. Agreed,
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health
care has got some merits to offer yet ample unfavourable aspects thrive in its lap. The upcoming paragraphs will analyse both praiseworthy aspects and shortcomings in a more specified way. Private medical services
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proven to be a blessing in few cases. The most plausible one is
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of experienced doctors,
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equipment that are found very easily in private hospitals. Considering
this
, it is logical to assume that a
person
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and nurses ratio to patients is quite low in privately owned
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, it would be safe to remark that mandatory attention and care is dispensed to each patient which,in turn, proves beneficial for the same.
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side of the picture is rather grim. Indeed,when a
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owned one, chances of getting exorbitant bills of treatment are run high. Worth noting is the fact that
instead
of providing medical care, private clinics are more in minting money by doing fake and unnecessary surgeries, prescribing expensive medicines or even by treating a dead
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over and over again. Everyday cases of private hospital deceit
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medical association in India speak volumes of how low these hospitals have steeped for the sake of money. Another factor that goes against
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done from here. At
last
,it can be summed up that no doubt private
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hospitals have some merits to offer yet the demerits of it,which far outstrips the former,are surely not to be missed and
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