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Some people think the money they earn should be enjoyed by spending it now, while other thinks that their earnings should be saved for future. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #money #earnings #future
There arises no question over the verity of the statement that an
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 number of
people
 nowadays, owing to globalization and
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 slew of factors, prefer foreign nations as their place of work and residence. Agreed, it has got scores of
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 aspects to offer yet some unfavourable ones thrive in its lap. The upcoming paragraphs will discuss both praiseworthy points and shortcomings in a more specified way. Immigrating to other countries for the purpose of living and working over there prove to be
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 in many a case. In the
first
 place, apart from developing and sharpening communication skills, it gives a person an insight into other cultures and makes him understand
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, beliefs and rituals of foreign nationals.
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 global contacts and fashions a
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that is
 truly international. It is imperative to note that in today's business world,
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great asset and assists in tapping the unlimited potential persisting in foreign lands and
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, makes
people
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 span of time. A prime illustration is of immigrants from India, not least from Punjab and Gujarat state, who went to overseas nations including the US, England and Canada and have established themselves as business as well as political tycoons after getting acclimated to new
people
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 side of the picture is rather grim. There is every possibility of
people
 landing in from another country being subjected to racial discrimination and rude as well as inconsiderate behaviour by the natives. Indeed, immigrant's distressing stories and painful life experiences abroad pertaining to their struggles in getting accepted ,both socially and professionally, and their victimization are evidence that it is not all rosy and one might
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 to get through mental trauma and physical hardships before settling. It may be added that
such
 experiences, and the feelings of disintegration from families as well as friends, pushes a person towards loneliness and other issues
such
 as stress and depression. 
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 are unfamiliar, chances of business losses are quite high. At
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, it can be summed up that no doubt there are some demerits of moving abroad for the purposes of work and living but the merits of it, which far outstrips the former, are surely not to be missed with a view to welcoming holistic growth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • money management
  • financial decision
  • financial stability
  • instant gratification
  • desires
  • enjoyment
  • satisfaction
  • lasting memories
  • experiences
  • financial security
  • emergency funds
  • long-term goals
  • retirement savings
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