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In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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Nowadays, one of the major
issue
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 of concern across the globe is heavy
traffic
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metropolitan areas. It has increased at a high pace in
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last
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the last
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 few years causing many problems.
This
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 essay will highlight
few
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 of the causes of
this
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 problem and what can be done in order to improve it.
Firstly
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, the increase in population is one of the
reason
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of
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for
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 a steep rise in the number of
vehicles
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 on the road.
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, a good percentage of
people
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 are well-versed financially and can afford their personal vehicle. They prefer commuting on their own,
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 adding to the increase in
traffic
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.
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, the public transport in few nations does not provide connectivity, due to which the
people
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 of that country tend to use their personal
vehicles
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. To illustrate, the developing nations
do not offer connectivity, leaving no
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do not offer connectivity, leaving any
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 choice for the
people
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 who wish to commute inter-state.
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, as a solution, the authorities should define some rules in order to control the usage of personal
vehicles
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.
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, in New Delhi, all the
people
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 tend to follow
odd even
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 rule, wherein
vehicles
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 with odd numbers are allowed to move in the city on certain days and even number
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vehicles
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of vehicles
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other days. It actually has proven to be helpful in controlling the
traffic
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 of the city.
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, the public transport should
also
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 be improved so that more and more
people
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 can access it easily.
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, citizens of all the nations should
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 act responsibly by sharing rides while travelling to a common destination when using their personal
vehicles
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. In conclusion, allocating an annual budget for the improvement of public transport facilities to ensure better connectivity can help in controlling the
traffic
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.
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, all the states need to implement some set of rules and make sure
people
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 should follow them religiously.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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