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All students should study art and music in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Studying
art
 and music in school for students giving them so benefits, and on
other
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 side reducing their concentration. The music is giving the students some relaxation and peace of mind which is increasing their concentration. In Jordan, studying
art
 and music is mandatory which is why the students there more effective and smart in other courses. On the
second
 hand, some people thinking studying
art
 is wasting time nor providing them with any positive energy or benefits.
However
, families in the current time are looking for strategies and professions easy to earn money thru it in future.
Accordingly
, points of view for
this
 chapter are having clashing, either to let the pupil learn more about
art
 or to let them focusing how to get money.
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