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In countries all over the world, the volume of road traffic is increasing at a faster rate than new roads are built. What are the causes of this problem? What are some potential solutions?

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Recently, because of the pandemic, individuals are forced to stay at home;
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, traffic
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 been decreased in about a year.
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, before
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 situation occurs, actually the speed of an increase in the amount of vehicle that was on the road outnumbered its construction of new roads. In the following essay, I will argue its reason and viable solution.
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 of all, slowness of the construction of new ways might be at the root of the phenomenon. Even though more and more
people
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 ride a vehicle than before and the demand for an increase in the capacity of roads rises, it is impossible to do so immediately because there are a lot of steps to build roadways. It is easier to happen that many
people
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 are influenced by something and start driving a car because it is a change in
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’s consciousness.
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, it is never easy to actually increase things physically.
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, it seems to be there is
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 way to solve
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 problem: it is to give up on building more roadways. As more are built, the more
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 will want to drive.
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, assume that a place in the countryside where there were no pavements before is being built.
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, what might happen is that more
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 will be able to ride in vehicles more comfortably, and the amount of traffic will rise. In conclusion, growth in
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’s demand for riding a car exceeds the speed of construction because the latter is not fast enough.
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, there might be no possible solution because as roadways are built, the amount of traffic will enlarge.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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