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Some people believe that excessive use of modern technologies, such as computers and smartphones, is negatively affecting the reading and writing skills of our young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some masses believe that advanced
technologies
 like smartphones , computers and other devices
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 detrimental effects on the reading and writing skills of our youths. In my opinion, I totally agree with
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 notion, as these new overused
technologies
 have a lot of harmful effects on an individual.
This
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First
 and foremost, today in our global village every new technology has its own pros and cons.
However
, new digital accessories have become a part of our daily needs, but the
overusage
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over usage
overuse
 of
such
technologies
 has negative effects on our life. Due to the upcoming e-library, there is
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decline in the selling rate of hard copy reading books.
Secondly
, youngsters are more engrossed in writing things online, which results in a decrease in practical writing skills.
For example
, according to the one German survey, those children who spend their maximum time
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writing on smartphones have bad
handwritin
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handwriting
.
Also
, spending more time in front of computers have a bad effect on the eyes as well as on the brain.
On the other hand
, people argue that using more mobile phones for reading will consume time and make a person active. In today's generation maximum work is done online, so a good typing skill on PC and mobile phones is a need of an hour.
Furthermore
, on
internet
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, there are a plethora of books available which can be accessible for reading very easily. So in a nutshell, modern
technologies
 have a lot of profitable gains, but using them excessively will harm your overall performance skills like reading or writing. I reaffirm my statement that anything which is overused is harmful to our body, so using any devices more than our limit will deteriorate our inborn natural ability,
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