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Water resources are falling deficient. Causes and Solutions.

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In
this
 contemporary era, the water level in the world is significantly reducing because of global warming
this
 is one of the main reasons for it.
This
 essay will discuss
this
 issue to demonstrate a proper solution to overcome
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this
 problem. On one hand, the fact behind global warming is pollution
this
 has changed the weather which has increased temperature throughout the world.
Moreover
, deforestation is one
among
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 the reason for climate change.
These kind
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 of changes in the weather is directly proportional to reduce in rainfall. So, it is affecting the aqua availability on the earth.
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,
a
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research conducted by Time Magazine in 2018 suggests that more than 90% of researchers think, global warming is due to pollution and cutting of forests. So, from
this
 example, we can understand that lack of aqua resources is because of
this
 issue.
On the other hand
, the solution for
this
, reduce the usage of gas-driven vehicles and
increase
 the usage of electric vehicles.
Additionally
,
increase
 the forest area by planting more trees,
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 will multiply oxygen levels in the climate. Predominantly, the government must emphasize
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this
 issue since
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this
 is affecting
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society. Reflecting, rainfall will raise, and
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 adequate water supply will available. To conclude, it's clear that if we look after the environment, it looks after us.
Otherwise
, it will respond to us badly. So, decreasing the air pollution and
increase
 of trees will not affect the climate.
Finally
, by following the above solutions we can
increase
 water resources all around the world.
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