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Some people think that women should not be allowed to work in the police force. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #women #work #police #force
In
this
 contemporary era, Some individuals think, ladies shouldn't work in the police
department
. I don't agree with
this
 statement.
In
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this
 essay will discuss
this
 scenario, by considering the statement by using
example
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 Time Magazine survey to demonstrate the points and support the claims. On one hand,
women
has
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 equal right in the society by considering
this
 point we can strongly oppose
this
 statement.
Moreover
, In
recent
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 past, we have seen so many cases in the world, where
women
 in
law
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the law
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 and order
department
has
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 solved so many criminal cases.
For example
, a survey from Time Magazine in 2018 suggests that one case changed
thinking
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 of people
on
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 the law and order
department
 because of the
intelegence
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intelligence
invovled
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involved
 in finding the criminal.
In addition
 to
this
, the main person in
idenfying
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identifying
 the criminal is a lady.
On the other hand
, according to the law, if you have
girl
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 suspect to be arrested
their
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 should always be a
women
 police to
interogate
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interrogate
 that person.
Additionally
, we have to increase the positions in the
department
 rather than removing them. Predominantly, the government has to emphasize
on
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this
 issue and increase the positions. To conclude, in my view, girls should have their jobs in the police force.
Similarly
, In other sectors as well and we have to give equal priorities to both men and
women
.
Finally
, the government should never remove them from
this
 sector it will
imablance
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imbalance
imbalanced
 the society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inherent equality
  • law enforcement
  • empathy
  • gender-based violence
  • community relations
  • diversity
  • team performance
  • systemic gender bias
  • physical requirements
  • culture of masculinity
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