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It is commonly believed that increasing the price of petrol is the best solution to alleviate the traffic pollution problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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In the modern era, the price of petrol is proliferating daily. Indeed,
this
 will increase
people
 to use more public transport than a personal vehicle and it
also
 helps to control environmental
pollution
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why I completely agree with
this
 phenomenon and what measures
government
 and scientist need to take to make it more effective. There are clearly two reasons where stem up the rate of petrol would be beneficial. One major factor is traffic control. As traffic is the biggest problem faced by the most developed countries, it is essential to limit the wheels on the road.
In addition
 to
this
, It
also
 helps to curb
the
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global issues include environmental
pollution
 as well as global warming. clearly, less vehicle on the road generates less air
pollution
.
For Instance
, A survey published in Newyork Times mentioned, the air
pollution
 index increased by 50% from 2015 because most
people
 use personal vehicle for their daily commute.
Therefore
, It is the best way to curb major problems of the country. Along with
this
, few measures need to take by the
government
 and scientist to avoid the problem faced by increasing the rate of patrol.
Firstly
, the
government
 needs to raise the number of public transport so that
people
 can travel without time constraint. Along with
this
, scientists need to work on cheap alternatives sources like solar energy, electricity. which not only a green energy source but
also
 cheap. So, these sources help to avoid the discomfort faced by
people
. In conclusion, as traffic on the road and global warming, atmosphere
pollution
are
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 the biggest problem faced by most of the countries, in that situation increase rate of
patrol
Add an article
the patrol
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 would help to control
this
 phenomenon. and
government
 and scientist needs to come forward to make
this
happend
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happen
happened
.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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