During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Dear Sir, It was my honour to meet a unique businessman like you on the flight during my
last
visit to China . Our seats are near to each other and we exchanged our expertise in different fields.
In addition
to that and based on my skills and Experience, you encouraged me to contact you for an executive chef position in your Italian restaurant. Honestly, your offer is a great chance to expand my experience in
this
kitchen.
Moreover
, I have many unique ideas to attract all categories of people to attend our dining hall . As you may ,know my Chinese background will enhance your business promotion in China. Because I worked as a Chef assistant in
well-known
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food franchise in China for more than 6 years.
Furthermore
, I believe that to introduce a new kitchen different from Chinese culture, it needs a different kind of commercial advertisements.
For example
, a special food presentation style with appropriate post captions on Instagram that meet their interest can be very attractive to them joins the cafeteria.
Also
offering vegetarian food like margarita pizza will encourage more people to join us . I am looking forward to meeting you soon to discuss more
about
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your vision and my new job duties. Sincerely yours, Olivia

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