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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that the government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

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The given line graph compares the energy consumption by various sources of fuel in the USA, between 1980 and 2030. It is clear that overall usage of energy sources for petrol and oil, coal, natural gas, nuclear and solar/wind is expected to escalate over the period shown. Whereas, the exception here is hydropower
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 predicted to remain relatively unchanged. In 1980, petrol and oil used up to 35 Quadrillion units, which was the highest of the year compared to other fuels.
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 it skyrocketed a little over 40 Quadrillion units in 2005, and now it is expected to be used under 50
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 by 2030. Meanwhile, coal and natural gas started at the recorded period at 15 and 20
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, which is predicted to reach up to 30 and 25
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 respectively, by the end of 2030. In terms of Nuclear and solar/wind power, it rose slowly from starting year to 2010, from4
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 to 6
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, and it is expected that it will stay the same till 2030.
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, the use of hydropower just will stay at the same figure, with some fluctuations around 4
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