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“Children all over the world should learn to speak a single, universal language fluently in addition to their native language.” To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#“children #world #language #addition
Nowadays
knowledge
 of
foreign
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language
 is important for everybody. But some think that it is not necessary to have
knowledge
 of
universal
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language
. In my opinion, having
knowledge
 of
universal
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the universal
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language
 is most important these days because it provides wider opportunities to those who
has
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grip
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a grip
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 on foreign
language
.
To begin
 with, each and every person should have
knowledge
 of universal
language
 so that they can communicate with everybody all over the world. Having
knowledge
 of
different
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the different
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 non-native
language
 helps in different situations.
For instance
, when I was young I lost in the Tibetan market and
then
 there I asked someone the way of our hotel he told me in
English
language
 and reached to my parents. At that time I knew
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english
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language
. So, it is worth
to know
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 the universal
language
.
Moreover
, a person who has
knowledge
 of
non-native
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language
 has wider opportunities
of
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 jobs in different countries. These days it is in demand to have
knowledge
 of
universal
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the universal
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language
 in every field. According to
me
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, children should learn
English
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the English
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language
 for
better
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a better
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 Career.
For instance
, one of my friends has a
knowledge
 of
Spanish
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 and
English
language
.
Then
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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