'We have an expression: food is not love'. Obesity these days is very common in our society. Some people believe our overeating habit and less physical exercise have left obese people to suffer from various illnesses. Discuss the solutions to remain fit.

Over the
last
few years, there has been a dramatic increase in the number of overweight
people
. Obesity is
the
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major health problem and it leads to various health problems like diabetes,
heartattack
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line. Excessive consumption of junk foods is the
first
and foremost cause
for
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obesity. In the past,
people
did not have much variety of foods. They rely more on homemade food but today there are numerous options available like
,
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Pizza, Burger, Pasta and many more.
People
love the consumption of these meals knowingly the fact
that is
compounded by a higher level of fats and sugar which makes them obese. Lack of exercises is another reason for weight gain. Most of us have jobs
which
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allow us to spend most of the time sitting on chairs. There are several solutions to prevent obesity. What is vital to achieving
this
target is self-discipline towards eating patterns and resolution to form a diet and fitness regime every day by consuming organic foods.
In addition
to
this
,
physical
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activity ought to be an important part of your routine. When we exercise, we not only burn the extra calories but
also
reduce the risk of illness diseases. To conclude, it is true that
a
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number of obese
people
is
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rising day by day to
this
problem can be tackled by making appropriate exercises and healthy balanced diet

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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