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The charts compare the
water
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 used for
agriculture
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, industrial and homes across the world between 1990 and 2000, and
water
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 used by
Brazil
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 and the Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000 It is apparent that overall the global needs for
water
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 rose significantly for the period shown, and that
agriculture
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 accounted for the most
use
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 of
water
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. We can
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 see that
water
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 consumption in
Brazil
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 was considerably higher than in the Congo. In 1990, around 500 km3 of
water
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 used by the
agriculture
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 sector worldwide; whereas, the figures for industrial and domestic
water
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use
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 stood at around one-fifth of that amount. By 2000, global
use
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 of
water
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 in the
agriculture
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 field skyrocketed dramatically over 3000 km3, industrial
water
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use
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 had risen to just under half that amount, and domestic consumption had reached approximately 500 km3. In 2000, the population of
Brazil
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 and the Congo were 176 million and 5.2 million respectively.
Water
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 consumption per person in
Brazil
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, at 359m3, was much higher than that in the Condo, at only 8m3, and
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 could be explained by the fact that
Brazil
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 had 265 times more irrigated land (265,000 km3).

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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