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Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life?

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The line graph illustrates changes in the number of
cars
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 owned by household in Britain between 1971 and 2007. It is apparent that the overall trend of
car
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 ownership has increased in Britain over the period shown. Particularly, the numbers of houses with two
cars
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 soared dramatically; meanwhile, the figures with a
car
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 fell. In 1971, half of the Britishers had not a regular
car
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. Around 44 % of the population had one
car
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, but only about 7% of households possessed two
cars
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. It was uncommon for families to have three
cars
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, numbers were around 2% of households falling into
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 category. The one-
car
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 household was the most common type from the late 1970s onwards,
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 there was a little fluctuation throughout the period. In 2007, the biggest change was in no
car
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 ownership, that was dwindled down steadily over the 36-years period, from just over 47% to 25%.
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, the tendency of possessing 2
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 increased steadily, started from 7 % and reached 27%, and the proportion of households with 3
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 rose approximately 3% ( from 2% to 5%).
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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