In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The line graph compares a typical temperature per month in three various cities: Athens, Barcelona, and Sydney
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from June to September.
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noted in 3
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of March. In regards the highest temperatures, these both cities
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the similar trend, which rises from
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to
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, reaches to its peak in August , and fells suddenly to
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again in September. Whereas
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in Sydney remains hot at 23
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in January, it
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steadily and reaches
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its low at just under 14
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in the month of July.
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in December. So, for Athenes and
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regional areas
  • big cities
  • encouraging
  • industries
  • businesses
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • economic growth
  • overcrowding
  • traffic congestion
  • employment opportunities
  • balanced regional development
  • preservation of natural resources
  • quality of life
  • cultural diversity
  • lack of infrastructure
  • amenities
  • skilled workers
  • impact on the environment
  • decline in the economy
  • social and cultural challenges
  • integrating
  • new industries
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