Many today feel that most urgent problems can only be solved by international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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during our lives that the government need to deal with its, even important

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or small

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. Depending on how

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of each situation, the government will

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the right way to tackle everything. In some

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we will need the support of international cooperation, but some just require the decision in

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country. The most primary concern that everyone is facing right now is Covid-19, a

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virus

makes

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global

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rating increase nonstop, every day we have

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of people in the

world

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Instead

of facing

this

health issue individually, all

contries

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countries

in the

world

are now gathering together to find the vaccine to deal with

this

international problem. Nowadays, there are some vaccines from countries

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successfully research a method that help people to limit the

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death

. Despite the fact that there are some issues

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to be controlled entirely within the state, even it

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damage

worldwide.

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Terrorism

that is

a global threat, which has been identified as a government-sponsored program in some part of the

world

. Due to

this

, under no circumstance, the government should act to wipe out and start taking necessary steps to counteract,

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one place.

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, it is clear that how to handle these kinds of

problems

is purely determined by the authority of the nation, hardly, others can get involved in their home affairs. To recapitulate, there some polemics that having

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should be better to

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and prevent the majority of

world

problems

. I support

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extent. But it is a great way if every nation

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an important role

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individually

or globally to against

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Summary
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In a nutshell
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Many today feel that most urgent problems can only be solved by international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that governments must apply high taxes to provide good public services for everyone. Give your opinion.

Curiosity can be seen in many ways. Please share an example of how you have demonstrated curiosity and how that has influenced your growth.

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvanatges of being self-employed?

There are many types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

Some people say that art subjects such as music, drama and creative writing era an essential part of education, and every school should include them in its syllabus. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples form your own experience.