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Many today feel that most urgent problems can only be solved by international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cooperation
In my perspective, there will be a lot of
problems
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 during our lives that the government need to deal with its, even important
problems
 or small
problems
. Depending on how
severity
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 of each situation, the government will
decided
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 the right way to tackle everything. In some
cases
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 we will need the support of international cooperation, but some just require the decision in
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an individual
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 country. The most primary concern that everyone is facing right now is Covid-19, a
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virus
 makes
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global
deadth
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death
depth
 rating increase nonstop, every day we have
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 of people in the
world
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way
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away
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.
Instead
 of facing
this
 health issue individually, all
contries
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countries
 in the
world
 are now gathering together to find the vaccine to deal with
this
 international problem. Nowadays, there are some vaccines from countries
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 successfully research a method that help people to limit the
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risk
 of
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death
. Despite the fact that there are some issues
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 to be controlled entirely within the state, even it
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damge
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damage
 worldwide.
Torrorisim
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Terrorism
that is
 a global threat, which has been identified as a government-sponsored program in some part of the
world
. Due to
this
, under no circumstance, the government should act to wipe out and start taking necessary steps to counteract,
this
 since the devastating consequences do not limit
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 one place.
Thus
, it is clear that how to handle these kinds of
problems
 is purely determined by the authority of the nation, hardly, others can get involved in their home affairs. To recapitulate, there some polemics that having
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an international effort
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 should be better to
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solve
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solve
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 and prevent the majority of
world
's
problems
. I support
this
 view
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 extent. But it is a great way if every nation
have
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 an important role
indivitually
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individually
 or globally to against
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evil
every
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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