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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communicate had has a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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 suggested been that more and more young
people
 communicate by electric products like mobile
phones
 and computers in
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recent years, most
people
 think that it's harmful to the development abilities of reading and writing. In my opinion, it's undoubted that will have disadvantage for our
such
 skills.
Firstly
, it's true that
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rational
 using
phones
 and computers are convenient and high effective,
however
, most of
young
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people
 can hardly self-controlled so that will cause overuse of electric products. Overuse will distract
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 of young
people
 during reading
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certain
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a certain
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 extent.
For example
, notifications of various apps pop up on our
phones
 at any moment, it
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 strong appeal for us so that our potential aware enter
this
 app. Naturally, we couldn't
reading
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book
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a book
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 use electric devices for several hours, our eyes will feel a little ache, and
then
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to focus on
screen
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the screen
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in
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high
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 degree.
Secondly
,computers and mobile
phones
 are more likely to hinder the frequency of handwriting, as well as the formal grammatical structures in writing. In our daily life, we used to send
message
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a message
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 as simple and fast as possible by
phones
.
For example
, it probably;y that 2 or 3 words can represent the meaning of a complete sentence
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 because
people
 always pursue effectiveness and shortcut.
Moreover
, writing has to a person has a strong ability of linguistic logic.
Thus
, communication use
phones
 compared to normal writing look similar, actually, it has significant differences. In conclusion,
although
 electric devices could boost the current development of society, it is able to us degeneration of reading and writing skills.
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