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Many people believe that advertising can have negative effects on customers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The given chart compares the amount of time per day that men and women of the UK spend doing various
activities
. It is apparent from
given
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 information that people in the UK spend more
hours
on
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apply
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sleeping than performing all other
activities
.
In contrast
, the least time
spend
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 by
both
 genders in sports, childcare, voluntary work and meetings, and other
activities
. On average,
both
 males and females spend the most
hours
 in sleeping, just over 8
hours
 daily. The
second
 most category
prefferred
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preferred
 by
both
 genders is
lesiutre
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leisure
activities
 including, watching TV, hobbies, social life and reading. Men spend 5
hours
 and 25
miutes
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minutes
; whereas, women spend 4
hours
 and 53 minutes, in total. It is noticeable that the activity of employment and study by males occupy more
75
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 minutes than the females (3.45
hours
 and 2.26
hours
 respectively). The other exception here is women are more occupied in housework and childcare, with almost doubled
time
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 than
of
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 men. Whereas, the voluntary work and meetings cover the similar timing by
both
 genders, under 20 minutes.
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