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The given chart compares the amount of time per day that men and women of the UK spend doing various
activities
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. It is apparent from
given
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the given
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 information that people in the UK spend more
hours
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on
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apply
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sleeping than performing all other
activities
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.
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, the least time
spend
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 by
both
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 genders in sports, childcare, voluntary work and meetings, and other
activities
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. On average,
both
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 males and females spend the most
hours
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 in sleeping, just over 8
hours
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 daily. The
second
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 most category
prefferred
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preferred
 by
both
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 genders is
lesiutre
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leisure
activities
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 including, watching TV, hobbies, social life and reading. Men spend 5
hours
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 and 25
miutes
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minutes
; whereas, women spend 4
hours
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 and 53 minutes, in total. It is noticeable that the activity of employment and study by males occupy more
75
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than 75
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 minutes than the females (3.45
hours
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 and 2.26
hours
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 respectively). The other exception here is women are more occupied in housework and childcare, with almost doubled
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the time
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 than
of
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on
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 men. Whereas, the voluntary work and meetings cover the similar timing by
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 genders, under 20 minutes.
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