In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this happening? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Naw days , it has been advertised by
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that their production
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the best and new .
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it can be a merit for companies , I think
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a disadvantage of advertising development . In the following essay , both of the
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Advertisements
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in
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might be effective to attract customers. When a company advertises for
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it produces
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which are emphasised
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new , many of
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can be familiar with the new services or tools .
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kind of notice
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encourages
the public to purchasing goods and trying on the services. When technological devices
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been attended by
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around the world and if an organization advertises a
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new electronical
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gadget
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as an intelligent mobile phone ,
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will be unattractive to buy it. It can
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be argued that the more marketings do notice for their produces , the more customer they can
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be have
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. Despite the fact that advertisement in
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would be profitable for their
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, it may be a negative point for
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. When there is a competition between marketing to take
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attention to organisation attendances , some unrealistic
advertisements
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in some
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would
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. So , the public can not have satisfaction whit their buying as the result of some sham notices in some business about the produces. As an example , some customers order
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new erasers which the
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materials used in the production are advertised by a stationary company while in
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situation the erasers do not erase clearly .
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,
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the business
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might do unreal
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to compare whit other rivals in the same industry which create sham notices . In conclusion , in my view , if business
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their new productions to
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, they will be able to
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in their industry.
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, as a
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a
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comparative marketing is observed between companies which can be
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cause
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doing some
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that is
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unrealistic to give customers attentions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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