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Some believe buildings should be built in a way that serves their purpose rather than just look beautiful. Others, however, say buildings should represent art too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some argue that
buildings
 should be built from the perspective of their
purpose
 rather than appearance. Others believe that
buildings
 should
also
 act as
the
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representatives of art. I personally think that the focus on
purpose
 is more important and practical than outlook. On the one hand, the
buildings
 that include all the features of its'
purpose
 can be more effective in terms of production. Despite
thier
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their
 design, they can include special rooms or areas that may be used to store tools and other useful materials.
Thus
, companies and organizations can save a decent amount of money as there is no need
in
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 renting
store houses
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.
Moreover
, some organizations can offer
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rent free
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 areas and rooms. In my opinion,
such
 an approach has many benefits and the appearance of
buildings
 is not a high price for economical advantages.
On the other hand
, creative or modern design can arouse people's attention.
This
 can be used in increasing the number of tourists in a certain city.
Moreover
,
unusual
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 and extravagant look is a powerful tool from the perspective of marketing.
However
, trends in art tend not to stay in one place and change quite rapidly.
Thus
, I believe that the mentioned benefits of unusual design will have a short time effect and more lasting options should be used. In conclusion, while some people believe that
buildings
in addition
 to their general functions should represent art, I think that they should be built according to their
purpose
.
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