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University students are incresingly studying abroad ad part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages.

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There are several obvious reasons why people should take a gap year.
First
 of all, you will have much
time
 to find your passion before education
next
 year. Try to do various activities like go travel,
study
 other languages and play the instrument.
For example
, play the piano, violin, and guitar. These will improve your skills which may be necessary
in
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 the future. The
second
 reason is a life experience which can make you better prepared for
university
.
Study
in
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university
 does not guarantee you will succeed in the future so
this
 is the best
time
 to learn and get great experiences. The most important reason is you can earn
money
 by yourself so there
are
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 a lot of
money
 to pay the tuition fee, make an investment and
also
 pay the cost of living. Taking a year off studying before entering
university
 results
from
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 many disadvantages.
Firstly
, Lossing some abilities.
For instance
, a calculation which is the most important in Mathetics and Physics, some words in foreign languages.
Also
, loss of passion to
study
 because you have a long
time
 to rest.
Then
, you will waste a lot of valuable
time
 and graduate late, if you spend various
time
 doing nonsensical things like sleep
all-day
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 and pay attention to poor activities.
Furthermore
, you might spend
much
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money
 than
study
 at
university
 due to the cost of living or finding your passion. If you like to play games, you will probably buy games and maybe use the
money
 to unlock some contents or
artifacts
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.
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