Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it so difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness ?

Happiness
is
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indespencable
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indispensable
emotional factor that everyone usually
persue
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pursue
in their daily life. Practically, it is very hard to define because the meaning varies from person to person.
Also
, there are many important factors
contributes
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in
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achievement
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of
this
emotion.
First
of all,
hapiness
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happiness
is not a physical quantity that can be measured but it is a mental state of
human
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mind that
chaneg
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change
changes
with the different condition.
As a result
, it is very hard to describe
happiness
as a universal term.
Secondly
, it is not only
depended
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on persons mentally
persons
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mentality but
also
depends on their expectations to become happy. It is not
superising
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surprising
supervising
that in a given situation, at a given time, two individuals may react differently.
Thus
, it is not easy to define
this
emotion.
On the contrary
, there are many factors required in achieving
hapiness
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happiness
. To commence with, material wealth is
best
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way to acquire
happiness
. Many of them try to buy material goods to become happy. According to the survey conducted by
cambridge
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Cambridge
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university on their students
resulted
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78% of them works want to buy their own house after graduation to feel happy.
Moreover
, health is
also
significant to get
happiness
. There are many people
thinks
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that mental and physical health are the key sectors
which
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led them toward happy emotion.
Furthermore
, socialising with their love once
also
bring
happiness
in their life. They try to communicate their daily routine with them and enjoy the company of others. In conclusion, there are many reasons which explain that why
happiness
is difficult to define and there are some factors
such
as good financial income,
healthy
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life-style
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lifestyle
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and serial relationships
can
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make a person happy.
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