Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, there is lots of competition in better lifestyle but Some people think we should accept our
destiny
because you will never get more than your
destiny
whereas other dispute that we should do our best and do not give up so easily.
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and I
also
agree with the
second
point of view.
To begin
with, lots of people
otimist
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optimist
optimise
on stars that whatever you can do but you can't fight
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against
your
destiny
, for
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if you always upset with your situation and complain about it you never gonna find
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peace
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in your life so it's better to
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whatever in your life and if you don't get it so don't feel
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about it because
that is
your
destiny
and if you accept it.
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you to survive in
this
world
as a result
no one
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everything so accept what is in your faith
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other
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, experts say you should do your best anyone can change his/her future.
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, there
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so many
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actor
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who, work in Multinational companies but they quit their jobs and do they
actully
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actually
wanna do and now, they are successful in their field because
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their hard work and never give up attitude, so everyone should try. It
is gives
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you
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strength
and
also
feel good about yourself that you never give up. In
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conclusion
, well its depend on person to person
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you try everything to gain
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prosperity
property
but never get that but
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think
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of
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trying is more
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role than luck. I prefer hard work
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this
since it feels
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at least
you do it and it really for the life battle.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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