Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there is lots of competition in better lifestyle but Some people think we should accept our

destiny

because you will never get more than your

destiny

whereas other dispute that we should do our best and do not give up so easily.

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and I

also

agree with the

second

point of view.

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with, lots of people

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optimist

optimise

on stars that whatever you can do but you can't fight

againt

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against

your

destiny

, for

instant

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if you always upset with your situation and complain about it you never gonna find

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peace

a feeling of peace

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in your life so it's better to

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whatever in your life and if you don't get it so don't feel

rant

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about it because

that is

your

destiny

and if you accept it.

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you to survive in

this

world

as a result

no one

get

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everything so accept what is in your faith

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other

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, experts say you should do your best anyone can change his/her future.

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so many

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actor

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who, work in Multinational companies but they quit their jobs and do they

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actually

wanna do and now, they are successful in their field because

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their hard work and never give up attitude, so everyone should try. It

is gives

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you

strenght

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strength

and

also

feel good about yourself that you never give up. In

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conclusion

, well its depend on person to person

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you try everything to gain

prosperty

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prosperity

property

but never get that but

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think

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trying is more

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role than luck. I prefer hard work

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this

since it feels

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you do it and it really for the life battle.

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Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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1Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

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