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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Other think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own safe, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer

#people #universities #graduates #skills #workplace #function #university #access #course #employer
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There are people who believe that universities should help their
students
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 to developed the
skills
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 that they will need to start their careers, many others consider that the main goal of a
university
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 should be to provide their student with general knowledge without caring if that will be useful or not in their future jobs. Universities are
istitutions
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institutions
situations
 where
students
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 should develop the
skills
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 they will be asked in
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 workplace. That’s why it is
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extremely
importart
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important
 to not only teach basic
knowldge
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knowledge
 and theoretical
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 but give
students
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 the tools that companies ask to join them. Studying professors’
studies
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 and books could be a good way to build the
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foundations
foundation
 of strong
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knowledge
 and open the mind to new points of view.
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, a strong cultural background will never be enough to meet the requirements of the job market.
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, many theoretical
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 might lose their value if they cannot find
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a connection
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 to the actual reality and they cannot
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into
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 the real world. For that
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 many universities give their
students
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 the possibility to put into
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 what they learnt,
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 during internships with companies.
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, still a lot of
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 courses are not focused on practical
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 and
students
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 at the end of their
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 are left with a lot of theoretical information but without experience they need.
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, during my undergraduate
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 many teachers opted to concentrate their program
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 the history of advertisement or cinema. When I conclude my degree I realised that most of the
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 I had were the
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 I developed on my own outside of
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university
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. And
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 abilities
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 the ones that allowed me to find two internships. In conclusion, not giving
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 the
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 they will need in a workplace and concentrate only
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 theory would be a big mistake.
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 will conclude their
university
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 programs but not being able to meet the requirement to find a job.
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