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Today’s fresh food like vegetables or fruits travels thousands of miles from the rural areas or farms before it reaches customers in cities or urban areas. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative trend?

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we live in a world, where we need
food
 for survival more than anything.
people
 who live in big cities do not get fresh
vegetables
 or fruit while
people
 who live in rural areas grow their own
food
 so they get fresh
vegetables
 and fruits. well, there is a plethora of reasons that why
this
 is not good for city
people
.
To begin
 with, Moving from one area to another take a long time and more often these trips are not good for freshly packed
food
.
Firstly
, there is a high chance of fruit or
vegetables
 are going to get squished because of long-distance drive and by the
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end
people
 are going to products that are not good in quality. I still remember
,
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 I read somewhere, that we throw 20 tons of
food
 approximately on an everyday basis which is a lot.
Secondly
, there is a chance of fruits or
vegetables
 getting rotten or stale by the end of travel. which is the 2nd biggest reason for
food
 shortage in certain areas of the country or province.
In addition
, these trips are not cheap at all.
For instance
, companies like Walmart,
Food
 basic or Giant tiger spend an average of 300 thousand to 1 million dollars just for one province. To sum up
this
, I think it,s a chance for us to start growing our own
food
,
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 so that we can not only consume fresh
food
 but
also
 save some money for tomorrow. I think Government
also
 make agriculture
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 necessary for all grades across Canada.
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