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Newspapers are less important nowadays because we have up-to-date access to the news on the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

#newspapers #access #news #internet
These days,
an
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internet
 has become more popular and most people are using day to day for
many
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purpose
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 and they can get
news
 from the digital portal
instead
 of
newspaper
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the newspaper
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as a result
, the newspaper is less popular among society. I strongly agree with
this
 statement for the following reasons.
To begin
 with, the digital
news
 portal can give
an instant
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instant information
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information
 to around the world and we can use by electronic devices
such
 as mobiles and laptops.
For example
, in
this
 pandemic
situation
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 we cannot go outside while we can know about the world
information
 through an online
data
 portal.
Moreover
,
this
 innovation can help
to
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people are able to obtain
data
 from anywhere and anytime.
In other words
, most office-goers obtain
an
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information
 after they finish work
especialy
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especially
 at night time.
Furthermore
, the magazine price is extra as compared
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an
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internet
. The
internet
 gives more
information
with
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 free and we can use many digital
portal
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portals
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 whether we get accurate
data
.
For example
,
many
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 online
news
portal
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portals
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 has been starting for the
last
 one decade due to most folks cannot prefer to read traditional method of getting
news
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the news
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. To be more precise, an online platform provides up-to-date
data
 to the population. To conclude, certainly,
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is popular
although
, nowadays
an
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internet
 access gives more convenient and comfortable to watch rather than traditional
one
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.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with
this
 phenomenon. I hope
this
 trend is conducive for the
next
 generation.
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