The charts below show the amount of income per household spent on different items in the UK in 2010 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the amount of income per household spent on different items in the UK in 2010 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts give information regarding the average expenditure
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used on a range of products
as well as
the percentage of items related to
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nutrients
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and garment
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consumed by residents
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period of 3 years. From a general perspective, the total income had a downward trend
while
the population consume a range of items increased from 2010 to 2013.
Moreover
, the proportion of
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had the highest
rate
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consumption. Looking at the first chart, it is immediately obvious that
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sum of expenditure reached
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29,000 before dropping to 25,000.
However
, the number of both nutrients and clothes slightly rose by 1000 over the
next
3 years. We can be seen that the percentage of meat and fish was the highest
rate
in
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consumption.
However
, there
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was a significant decrease from 25% to 15% between 2010 to 2013.
Next
, both
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product
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along with
vegetarian food
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dramatically rose from 15% to 20% and 20% to 35% , respectively. The item with the highest percentage of consumption
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in 2013. There was a sharp fall of 10% in
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rate
.
Finally
, the number of consumers
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other food and drinks
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remained stable after 3 years.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • household income
  • categories
  • comparison
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • proportion
  • highlight
  • illustrate
  • fluctuate
  • markeda change
  • significant
  • trend
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