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The charts below show the amount of income per household spent on different items in the UK in 2010 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the amount of income per household spent on different items in the UK in 2010 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts give information regarding the average expenditure
was
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used on a range of products
as well as
 the percentage of items related to
nutrient
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nutrients
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 and garment
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consumed by residents
a
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period of 3 years. From a general perspective, the total income had a downward trend
while
 the population consume a range of items increased from 2010 to 2013.
Moreover
, the proportion of
costume
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 had the highest
rate
in
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of
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 consumption. Looking at the first chart, it is immediately obvious that
a
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 sum of expenditure reached
at
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29,000 before dropping to 25,000.
However
, the number of both nutrients and clothes slightly rose by 1000 over the
next
 3 years. We can be seen that the percentage of meat and fish was the highest
rate
 in
household’s
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 consumption.
However
, there
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was a significant decrease from 25% to 15% between 2010 to 2013.
Next
, both
dairy
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the dairy
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 product
rate
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rates
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along with
 vegetarian food
rate
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rates
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 dramatically rose from 15% to 20% and 20% to 35% , respectively. The item with the highest percentage of consumption
was clothes
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was clothed
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 in 2013. There was a sharp fall of 10% in
vegetarian
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the vegetarian
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rate
.
Finally
, the number of consumers
used
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who used
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 other food and drinks
which
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remained stable after 3 years.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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