Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both and give your opinion.
Human activity has had a bad effect on herbs and living beings around the globe. A few individuals believe that
this
cannot be changed, while
others think steps can be taken to bring about a change. Firstly
, it will discuss the reasons and secondly
, the actions to bring the change.
Breakthroughs in industrialization have already brought tremendous changes in all walk
of human life, the world over. Fix the agreement mistake
walks
Although
the government have started spreading awareness on saving trees, desertification and industrialization have already impacted greatly which led to the extinction of many species
. In addition
to this
, erosion is the main cause of endangered species
that cannot be changed and industrialization have
Change the verb form
has
also
affected the polluting environment. According to
a survey, researchers of the UN have predicted 1,00,000 species
are threatened with obsolescence in
Change preposition
apply
this
year.
Education, one of the most important factors in the development of the individual in particular
should be given top priority. desertification is the main cause for the elimination of trees and animals, not only
Rephrase
.
governments
around the world Capitalize word
Governments
must
Verb problem
are
take
a step forward to spread awareness among the public and outlaw logging, but Wrong verb form
taking
also
educate folks on how destructive our activities can be for herbs and animals. To cite an example, the South African government outlawed erosion in 2015 having impressive results, because of which many species
have been saved.
In conclusion, logging has caused the destruction of shrubs and living beings, which leads some community
to believe that Fix the agreement mistake
communities
this
cannot be changed. However
, in my opinion, government
and individuals can do several things to stop those activities, which Correct article usage
the government
damages
our planet.Correct subject-verb agreement
damage
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