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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree?

#development #communication #people #friends
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nowadays the discussion regarding whether the advancement of
internet
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 eliminates
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 and enable
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people
 to make virtual
friends
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 has sparked off an intense debate. In my honest opinion, remote
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make
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people
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's life easier in terms of
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-making,
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 it is not a perfect
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 to the traditional ways of
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. on the one hand, the development of
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cyber technology
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 boost the process of making relationships.
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convinced
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 tools like Zoom,
people
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 are able to make contact and communications remotely without really physically reach out with
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which save the time consumed and the cost of
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transportation
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 may in turns enable
people
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 to make more
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 and reduce
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baldness
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boredness
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, due to the characteristic of
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 that
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amont
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amount
 of
peopel
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people
 have access to it, the existence of
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remote
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 tools
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people
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 with chances to make a large variety of
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 two factors illustrate the fact that the internet
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 to some
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 help
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 to make
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • geographical gaps
  • interact
  • social media platforms
  • messaging apps
  • revolutionized
  • physical distance
  • online communities
  • camaraderie
  • immediate surroundings
  • unparalleled opportunities
  • superficial relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • emotional warmth
  • tactile comfort
  • digital communication
  • digital divide
  • internet censorship
  • global connectivity
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