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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree?

#development #communication #people #friends
nowadays the discussion regarding whether the advancement of
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 eliminates
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 and enable
poeple
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people
 to make virtual
friends
 has sparked off an intense debate. In my honest opinion, remote
communication
make
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people
's life easier in terms of
friends
-making,
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 it is not a perfect
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substitute
 to the traditional ways of
communication
. on the one hand, the development of
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cyber technology
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 boost the process of making relationships.
Firstly
,
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convinced
convenience
 by the remote
communication
 tools like Zoom,
people
 are able to make contact and communications remotely without really physically reach out with
friends
,
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which save the time consumed and the cost of
transportaions
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transportation
transportations
 .
This
 may in turns enable
people
 to make more
friends
 and reduce
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baldness
boldness
boredness
.
secondly
, due to the characteristic of
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 that
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amount
 of
peopel
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people
 have access to it, the existence of
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remote
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 tools
also
 provide
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the
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people
 with chances to make a large variety of
friends
.
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 two factors illustrate the fact that the internet
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 to some
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 help
people
 to make
friends
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • geographical gaps
  • interact
  • social media platforms
  • messaging apps
  • revolutionized
  • physical distance
  • online communities
  • camaraderie
  • immediate surroundings
  • unparalleled opportunities
  • superficial relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • emotional warmth
  • tactile comfort
  • digital communication
  • digital divide
  • internet censorship
  • global connectivity
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