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Some people argue that the government should give every unemployed person a mobile phone and should make sure they have access to the Internet. They believe this is the best way of using public money to reduce the problem of unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A lot of
people
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 think that the best way to resolve the unemployment problem in the world is that the government provides cell
phones
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 and access to the
internet
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 to everyone who has lost their job. But access to the
internet
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 and having nothing to do should bring some problems,
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 as addiction to online games and social
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. Nowadays
people
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 are used to having
phones
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 and using them for work.
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 when they are out of the office and they have a meeting
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 or reading emails when they are on vacation. But giving cell
phones
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 to
people
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 that do not have a regular job could increase unemployment even more. Addiction to online games is a development problem that starts from the lack of activities in
people
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's lives , especially when they do not work or study.Those
people
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 might spend 8-10 hours a day playing games or using their social
media
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 and doing nothing at all. On the other ,
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 could be some
people
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 that spent their full access to the
media
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 finding available jobs on the
internet
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 or maybe creating content for social
media
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.
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, there exist some platforms
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 as Facebook, youtube, tik
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, among others that pay some influencers to make content on their platforms and
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 considered a job. Having said that, cell
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 and the
internet
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 are important for work because they facilitate things but when
people
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 do not have anything to do
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 might cause problems. For that ,reason the government should not give them to unemployed
people
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