Traditional ideas from older people about the way to live and behave are not helpful to young people and their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
In developing India nearly 90
percent
youngsters do work as well as depend on new technology like Change the spelling
per cent
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a smart
smart phone
, internet , some machines Correct your spelling
smartphone
ect
. And their lifestyle Correct your spelling
etc
have
changes sometimes smart but sometimes not. So, old Change the verb form
has
people
try to understand them about traditional ideas
how to live healthy as well as stress free
. but some Add a hyphen
stress-free
people
claim that its
not helpful for us.
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it's
it is
in
my opinion, I think I Add the comma(s)
,in
am totally agree
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totally agree
to
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with
above
statement because older Add an article
the above
people
have experience about how to live and behave so, there
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their
ideas
are always helpful for youngsters.
To begin
with, older peoples enjoy there
life very naturally Replace the word
their
there
woke up time and sleeping time are fixed they do Correct your spelling
their
proper
diet as well as exercise that’s the reason they live Add an article
the proper
long
life. Add an article
a long
Moreover
, they take care of environment
. and respect Add an article
the environment
younger
. they do daily worship and believe Correct article usage
the younger
on
natural therapy . Change preposition
in
although
they have a knowledge
about how to use natural medicines.
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knowledge
a piece of knowledge
Secondly
, now a days
young Correct the word
nowadays
people
do not want any advice from others as well as they do not want stay in joint
family. Because of that reason they behave as Add an article
a joint
self centred
. In young Add a hyphen
self-centred
peoples
we don’t see Add a comma
,peoples
touchyness
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touchiness
toughness
now a days
. Correct the word
nowadays
Although
because of their busy sheduld
they don’t want to follow traditional Correct your spelling
should
schedule
ideas
which came from older people
.
Thirdly
for
example, nearly 80 Add the comma(s)
,for
percent
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per cent
teenagers
are addicted Change preposition
of teenagers
towards
watching TV, playing video games, mobile phones etc. if they got advice to play outdoor games like running , swimming etc from olders Change preposition
to
people
then
they are not interested what
they say equally they think Change preposition
in what
its
not helpful for us.
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it's
it is
Lastly
in my point of view always accept traditional ideas
from our older one because they have many years of experience as well as these ideas
are very helpful for well being. In opposite of that olders
don’t force to Correct your spelling
holders
elders
youngster
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the youngster
for
following conventional Change preposition
to
ideas
in same
way . young Add an article
the same
people
follow them with their point of view.Submitted by padmajakulkarni140 on
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