All over the world societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. Obesity affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How can it be tackled?

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of fatness becoming
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serious issue nowadays. It
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more in young and grown-up.There are many causes
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increase
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obesity. In the upcoming
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I am discussing the factor and solutions.
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fast food
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is the main factor which causes many health diseases. Because of its popularity, juvenile and
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adults
adult
make it their habit to consume it in their daily routine. Most of the parents busy
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their hectic schedule and will not
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meals and their children
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used to having frozen food, beverages etc.
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, the cokes which contain
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a lot
of sugar which is the key factor of obesity. Another reason is the
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development of gadgets or indoor activities. Due to that, most of the children like to spend their time
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using phones, playing
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video
games and adults are busy in their jobs working long hour shifts. The solution to handle
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is the
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awareness
about the consumption of unhealthy cuisines.
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their children and
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youngster have to make the habit of daily routine
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exercise
. Physical activities help them to get rid of
such
kind of diseases. There are many vegetables and fruits available in the market which are full of nutrition and protein and help them to stay healthy. To
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that young people and
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adults
are the future of the world. So their parents should take care of their needs and help them to live a healthy life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity
  • Overweight
  • Epidemic
  • Sedentary
  • Processed food
  • Fast food
  • Nutritional education
  • Awareness
  • Stress
  • Emotional eating
  • Genetic factors
  • Access
  • Healthy food options
  • Marketing
  • Urbanization
  • Lifestyles
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