People feel that educational success is dependent on having a good teacher, others say it depends not the attitude of the student. Discuss both side and state your opinion*

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Human life is unimaginable without education.

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, some people argue that academic success completely depends upon the capabilities of an educator while

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think

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the way a student frames his mind. In my

opnion

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, academic achievements

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upon the instructor.

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with,

interest

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of a scholar towards studies is pivotal for his academic

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excellence

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, in a class teacher teaches all his disciples with

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enthusiasm but, only

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of them attain

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excellence

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, all the

students

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are not equally inclined towards academic learning

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, they lack in their academic achievements but display

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magnificent

results in their

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activities like sport, are

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music. At

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, family values are

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of significant importance in determining their attitude towards educational learning.

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having highly educated parents are more responsible towards achieving academic goals, unlike those who come from

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business

background.

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Nevertheless

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are known

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builders of nation". So, quality teaching is always needed for building a strong foundation,

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, a strong nation.

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, it has always been noticed that a good instructor can pull the weakest of his student to the top.

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can create magic in the classroom to make their pupil learn difficult topics in an easy and interesting way.

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, kindergarten

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help young and new pupils to adjust themselves

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new

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school environment in

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of days. Instructors can very well appreciate weakness in their

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, thereby can help them to fill up academic gaps in a very smooth way, without putting

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effort.

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, educators can pressurise a student to the best of his abilities by creating

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of competition among his scholars

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, allowing them to achieve academic success. In conclusion,

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even though

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students

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who

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to work hard for attaining excellent and splendid results in his

eduction

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education

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but responsible and good

teachers

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are the

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who can take

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out

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and help you to rise and shine.

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who can help you to build your desires and can show you

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away

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to achieve them

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effortlessly

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

346 words

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People feel that educational success is dependent on having a good teacher, others say it depends not the attitude of the student. Discuss both side and state your opinion*

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people believe that it is a waste of time ot read read newspapers and watch news on televison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that modern technology has brought people together but other say it has driven us apart. Discuss the both views and give your opinion.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?