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The world of work is changing rapidly and people canot rely on one job or same working cindition of life ? What are the cause of it

#world #work #people #canot #job #cindition #life
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 has been increasing day by day .
People
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 usually give more importance to lucrative wages and promotions .To
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fulfil
 these demands ,they easily give resignation to
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job
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 and choose
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.In upcoming paragraphs ,
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 will discuss what
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 the main cause associated with it and
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useful
 measures . The most crucial course of why
people
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 rapidly
change
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 their
job
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 is low wages .Due to inflation ,it becomes
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 cumbersome task to earn the bread and butter for
a middle class families
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middle class families
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.
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 ,they are compelled to
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 their jobs.
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,in developing countries like India ,where the gross domestic product rate fell rapidly since
last
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 five years which leads to
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the
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 prices of things.
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 , 56%of opulent
people
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 choose another
job
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 ,which offers high
salries
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salaries
.
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,to get a higher promotion,
people
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also
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 tend to
change
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 their work rapidly.In
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 era ,
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the competitive
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 rate is very high , firms or organisations usually organize
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competition
 between
employees
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 , which attracts the most of
employees
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. A survey conducted by United state in
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which
 they revealed ,25%
employees
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 of IT companies get
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 promotion every year. There are two main measures to overcome
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 trend ,
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 ,due to advancement in technology ,it becomes difficult to keep update with
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 technology ,during
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 condition ,it makes the duty of organization organise free seminars and
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 deliver short
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course
courses
 certificate programs which would be
helpfull
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helpful
 in
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fulfilling
 the customer's demands.
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,
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the government
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 should make strong legislation against the firms, especially in private sectors who
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does not
doesn't
 give basic salary scales to
employees
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 . Resulting in,no one will
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change
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 their
job
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 if they get
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 amount of money. To conclude , for the purpose of
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lucrative
locating
 wages and
promtions
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promotions
 ,
people
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oftenly
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often
change
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 their jobs .Regimes should make strict rules against the firms who paid less to their
employees
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 .
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