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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Nowadays it has become popular to visit non-tourist
places
. Visiting
such
places
 gives new experiences and emotions that can attract more and more
people
.
However
,
such
 a journey can be dangerous for a beginner as well as for professionals and requires training before visiting. In
this
 essay, I will describe the cons and pros of
this
 interest. What is the profit of
this
 and why does it attract
people
?The benefits of
this
 is a chance to test yourself it is a test of your physically and mentally healthy. It is a unique experience and personal achievement as you understand that
people
 do not do it before.
For example
, visiting a place like Antarctica gives it a distinct experience
that is
 not available for anyone. Unique nature and
places
 where
people
 have never been. On another hand, it can be dangerous and for someone unfortunately it can cost a life. Usually,
such
 exotic
places
 are not prepared for the visitors and they need to be aware of all the challenges which can appear. It means that if you will have some emergency situations and you will need some help it may be a problem as it can be not available. In conclusion, there are different types of
places
 that tourists can choose for a visit. Some of them can be dangerous for visitors. I strongly believe that before visiting
such
places
people
 should think twice and if they still decide to do
this
 to prepare as much as possible.
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