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Some people think that single-sex schools are better than mixed schools. Others believe that mixed-sex schools are the only way for children to learn. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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There are some single-sex
schools
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 existing around the world, but not in a large quantity.
Single-sex
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school
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 is
a
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education
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 approach that student learning
under
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the
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 environment that only has
single
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gender
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, but
mixed-sex
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school
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 is normal. I think
mixed-sex
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school
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 is better for
students
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 to improve themselves and is sexual equality. The main reason
of
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 creating single-sex
schools
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 is that
school
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 can
maximising
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 the utility of their
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education
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 resources. Different
gender
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 thinking in different ways and may good at different
subjects
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. Male may more specialise in science lessons than female, and female may be more consistent in arts and humanities lessons.
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, after they graduated, most
of
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males
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the males
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 chose
science related
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 fields as their jobs and females chose humanities respectively. If teachers educating
single
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gender
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students
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 like male, they can concentrate more human or
finance
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 resources
into
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science related
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subjects
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 to improve their
education
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 quality.
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, single-sex
schools
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 are useful for preventing younger
students
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 from
early
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 relationship which may highly affect their
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education
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 performance.
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,
students
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 should try different
subjects
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, but it will be very queer if a female student
want
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 to learn her favourite
subjects
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 but only popular in a male
school
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.
Mixed-sex
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school
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 should be a better structure to offer diverse options for
students
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. According to some reports, female
students
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 studying at
mixed-sex
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schools
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 were more likely to explore and concentrate on
the
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non-traditional familiarising
subjects
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 like physics and physical--due to the
classmates
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classmate's
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 teamwork and without feeling loneliness.
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, male and female have different strengths and their thinking approaches are
slight
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 different,
that is
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 good for the development of some
subjects
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.
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, in management and law classes, different
gender
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students
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 have different views, males may consider more about the practical sides and females in the emotional sides, which can be exchanged and improved easily. In my opinion, it is important to have
mixed-sex
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schools
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. In
additional
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 to the above advantage of
mixed-sex
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school
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,
school
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 is mirroring the real world,
students
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 should learn how to communicate, especially between different
gender
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. Separating student with different
gender
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 may create a communication barrier between them in the future. It
also
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a
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 important factor
of
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 the developments of
students
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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