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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or not agree

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Some people consider that teenagers should be demanded unpaid community
work
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 in their free time. In my own opinion,
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 idea has its pros and cons in equal measure so that I will discuss both sides below.
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 with, all
children
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 are the future of
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 world.
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, it is vital to equip teenagers with
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 skills and experiences to help them deal with diverse kind of practical situations.
Children
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 take
oppotunities
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opportunities
 to make use of their huge knowledge from school for community
work
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instead
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 of
gluing
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 their eyes to video game or television. With their professional skills,
children
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 are able to not only
fulfill
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 their dreams but
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 enhance life standard.
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, being volunteers for social activities makes adolescents know how to cooperate, communicate, manage,... which is useful for their growth and future job.
On the other hand
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, all of us know that it is hard for youngsters to put up with pressure. Because of complex trouble at
workplace
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the workplace
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,
children
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 can be overwhelmed by tension.
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, adolescents go in fear of facing up with
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a problem
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 that affects their upbringing as well as future
work
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 negatively. All in all,
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 idea has its positive and negative effects on youngsters. Individual know what they really need for their life, adults should give teenagers good instructions and
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 let them make their own decisions to do unpaid community
work
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 or not.
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